Editing: Double Page Spread- Final draft 1 (Feedback)

 

This is my final draft of my newspaper, I love the colour and the clear focused picture, showing the audience the location and connecting with the main character. Also linking to the connections of genre and farming documentary from the green colours and the country style font shown.

 Feedback-

Katie- The text of 'coming to a cinema near you' implies that the advertisement is for a trailer, giving the audience a wrong message and confusing them on thinking its a trailer. Due to the fact the advertisement is for a Short Film the text shown state a date when the short will be shown on the chosen distributor channel, Channel 4. I love the colours as they show a realistic trait of farm life and connect with the genre of Documentary. 

 

Jade- The text is confusing and makes the audience think the advertisement is for a Trailer not a Short, however I love the critical acclaim as it shows the audience the popularity and allows the audience to see awards that the Short have won, creating interest and encourage audiences to view the film . Maybe change the background to clear to hind the black drop as it creates an unrealistic add and shown its clearly been edited, doesn't blend in to the conventional colours.

 

Megan- I love the main focus picture as I feel it draws the audience into the film and encourages them to watch it. The main picture allows the audience to become connected and understand the mise en scent of the character perhaps connecting to the storyline and narrative of the short. Have you thought about changing the text at the bottom as it doesn't connect with an idea of advertising an short. 

 

Overall action next-

From the clear feedback given I will acted upon changing the text to match the conventions of advertising a short and allow the audience to instantly connect with the advertisement, by changing the text to a channel 4 distributor instead of viewing at the cinema but also giving a date and time to view the Short, making it clear for the audience. I will change the background on the critical acclaim to blend into the background and not look over edited for the audience, making them see the realistic side of the advertisement and professionalism. I will keep the main picture and colour the same as its conventional and allows the audience to connect with the location and main character, encouraging them to watch the Short.